Story writing class: Sunday at 7am PDT
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It happened a long time ago, but Tina can remember it as if it were yesterday.
It was late, she was getting ready to go to sleep, when Paula, her neighbor, knocked at her door.
She couldn't find Fluffy, her cat. She was desperate. She asked Tina to help her look for Fluffy around the neighborhood.
Tina told her neighbor: "Oh, I have not seen Fluffy for a couple of days". She thought that it was important for Tina to find her pet.
Tina felt the desperation in Paula's voice. She grabbed her coat and went with Paula to look for Fluffy. The two women were searching the neighborhood in the middle of the night. They were calling Fluffy's name in the quietness of darkness.
Tina spent hours calling Paula´s cat in Spanish, but she was wondering whether the "beast" could understand her...as Fluffy was used to English. Tina though that the situation is was surreal.
There was a small house nearby, but Tina didn't like it because it looked creepy. Near the house they could hear a sound, like a cat's scratching, but they weren't sure. They tried to approach the small house, even if they were afraid. "Fluffy... come out, my good kitty". Suddenly, the shadow of a cat appeared. "Oh look Paula, Fluffy is there. The kitty came close to them.
Paula held her dear cat in her arms and said: "Thank you very much Tina, I´m so happy." After all what had happened, the two girls were tired and they decided to go back home. But before they left that old house they could see a dark shadow, and it seemed to be a man who was slowly coming toward them.
Back home, Fluffy was somewhat different. Tina fed her, but she roared a lot. Paula noticed it and asked herself what had happened to Fluffy. Around 12 pm, she was in bed. She could hear someone walking in the corridor, near Fluffy's room.
Paula was scared, she wanted to call Tina on her mobile phone but she had second thoughts. She got up form the bed and slowly opened the door to peek into the corridor. She saw a silhouette walking towards where Fluffy was sleeping.
She took several minutes to take this in. She refused to accept that it was really happening, and she could do nothing but look skeptically at the door. Then she fell sleep after the hard evening!
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before corrections
It happened a long time ago, but Tina can remember it as if it were yesterday.
It was late, she was getting ready to go to sleep, when Paula, her neighbor, knocked at her door.
She couldn't find Fluffy, her cat. She was desperate. She asked Tina to help her look for Fluffy around the neighborhood.
Then, Tina told her neighbor : "Oh, I have not seen Fluffy since a couple of days". She thought that it was important for Tina to find her pet
Tina felt the desperation in Paula's voice that her cat was missing. She grabbed her coat and went with Paula to look for her cat. The two women was searching the neighborhood in the middle of the night. They were calling Fluffy's name in the quietness of darkness.
Tina spent hours calling the Paula´s cat, but she was wondering herself whether the "beast" could understand her...as Fluffy was used to English. Tina though that situation is was surrealist.
There were a small house nearby, but Tina doesn't like the house because it looks creepy house. Near of the house they could hear like cat's scratching, but they weren't sure. They try to approached the small house, even they were afraid. "Fluffly... come out my good kitty". Suddenly, the shadow of cat appeared. Oh look, Fluffy is there.. Paula. The kitty came close to them.
Paula held her dear cat on her arms and said: "thank you very much Tina, I´m so happy..." All that coming and going the twoo girls were tired and they decided to come back at home, but before left that old house they could watch a dark shadow, and it seemed to be a man who came slowly to the both girls.
When Fluffy back home, there was something different to her. Tina feed her, but her roar a lot. Paula seen it and she was asking, what happen to Fluffly, she didn't like usually. Around 12 am, they were on the bed. They could hear someone walking in their corridor, near Fluffy room.
Paula was scared she wanted to call Tina by mobile phone but she has second thoughts. She got up form bed and slowly open the door to peak on the coridor. She saw a silhouette walking towards where Fluffy was sleeping.
She took several minutes to take this in. She refused to accept that it had really happened, and she could do nothing but look sceptically at the door, then she fell sleep after the hard evening!
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