Lottery winners

Story writing class: Sunday at 7am PST

at the end you can read the story before corrections

 Lola woke up, made tea, and sat at the table for breakfast. She turned on her smartphone and started her Instant Message app. There was a new message from "Jim23". She was surprised because she had no such name in her contact list, but she was curious and she tapped to open it. The message said: "Hey Lola, come to the coffee shop just around the corner. I want to tell you something that is going to change your life". 

Suddenly she remembered who Jim23 was. He was her old friend in secondary school. They didn't talk too much.

Lola answered: "OK, I'm getting ready." 

Lola knew him as a developmentally challenged person, so she was worried something had happened to him. She was busy that day, so she replied to him: "Are you sure that you were writing to the right person? If yes, I will meet you at 5pm in coffee shop at the mall Bambi". 

On the way to the coffee shop Lola got another message from Jim23.

The message had  just "ok" in it. She felt a little bit scared but kept going.

When she arrived, she looked inside the coffee shop, just to be sure.

She kept at a distance, in case she just had gotten a wrong message. She saw a tall guy with a  handsome face who was waiting in front of the coffee. She whispered, "Is that Jim?".

He said: "Yes. Do you remember me? We used to play together when we were secondary school students. Was it fun? By the way, Have you ever heard about the ABC lottery in the USA? The No 1 prize is 10 billion dollar. To tell you the truth… I won! I got the No.1 prize! That's why I sent you a message again.

Lola didn't know what to tell to Jim. She just asked him "So do I get involved with this luck?", and smiled.

She offered him dinner at the restaurant to talk about this adventure. She was surprised and kept staring at him, "He changed a lot!", she thought. He talked like an intelligent person and he worked as a designer. She was thinking inside of her heart. Then she said, "I don't believe what you told me, so tell me how did you know my cellphone number?" It got personal now.

Actually, she knew jim23 was telling a lie, because her younger sister got the No.1 prize of the ABC lottery yesterday. And many TV newscasters came to her house to interview her sister yesterday. She was so tired of it. So, jim23 was just a crazy person.



Lola woke up, made tea, and sat at the table for breakfast.
She turned on her smartphone and started her Instant Message app. There was a new message frorm"Jim23".
She was surprised because she had no such name in her contact list, but she was curious and she tapped to open it.
The message said: "Hey Lola, come to the coffee shop just around the corner. I want to tell you something that is going to change your life.

Suddenly see remember who is Jim23.

Jim23 is her old friend in secondary school. They didn't talk too much.

lea answed jim
" ok i gettin ready

Lola knew him as a retarded person, so she was worried something happen to him. She was busy that day, then she replied to him: "Are you sure that you were writing to the right person? If yes, i will meet you at 5pm in coffee shop at the mall Bambi"

On the way to the coffee shop Lola got another message from Jim23.

The message has got just "ok". She felt a little bit scared but kept going.

She kept the distance, in case he just got a wrong message. She saw a tall guy with handsome face waited in front of the cafe. She whispered, "Is that Jim?

He said, yes. Do you remember me??
We play together when we were secondary school student.Was it fun??
By the way, Have you ever heard about ABC lottery in USA??
The No1. A prize is 10 billion dollar.
To tell the truth… I won!! I got No.1 prize!!
Thats why I send massage to you again.

Lola don't know what to tell to Jim, just asked him "so do I get involved with this luck?" and smiled.

she offer him dinner at the restaurant to talk about this adventure

She was surpraised and kept staring at him, "He changed a lot!", he talked like intelligent people and he works as a designer. She was thinking inside of her heart. Then she said, "Don't believe that message, so tell me how do you know my cellphone number?" It gets personally now

Actually she knew jim23 is telling a lie.
Because her young sister got the No.1 prize of ABC lottery yesterday.
And many TV newscaster caster came to her house to have interview with her sister yesterday. And she was so tired about it.
So, jim23 was just a crazy person...





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