Story writing class: Sunday at 8am PDT
At the end you can read the story before corrections.
They also found an old treasure map, and they found a secret tunnel under the house, which they decided to explore using the treasure map.
While they were exploring the tunnel using the treasure map, they found something. They found a treasure chest filled with candy!
They were not sure how long the candies had been there, but they thought it would have been a waste to leave them there, so they picked them all up with a sack.
While Jacob carried them on his shoulders, Megan said: "What are you going to do with them? They may be cursed"
They met 3 purple unicorns and they were invited to fly to the unicorn world.
The bright shine came from above, and they started to see the unicorns alive. Jacob asked Megan, "Let's go Megan, let's see where the unicorns are headed to."
They rode the unicorns. They arrived to a spooky place.
The spooky place was called "St. John's Farm". The farm had been abandoned. After they found the farm, they decided to check it out, and they found dead people walking!!
The dead people looked like zombies and came very quickly towards them. Megan started freaking out and shouted at them. Jacob thought about the candies they had found and threw some at them while running. The zombies stopped to pick up those candies.
The zombies took the candies and ate them. Not long after they ate the candies, they turned into rainbow sheep.
There were some surviving zombies. The unicorns came closer to Jacob and Megan, and turned into great magicians.
The great magicians gave them a magical wand. The wand made their wish come true only once.
Jacob and Megan wished that the dead people walking were gone, but the magicians couldn't grant that wish. The magicians disappeared, both of them have panicked. The little girl showed up and shot some zombies.
Most of the zombies which weren't turned into rainbow sheep kept following them because there were no candies left, so the little girl kept slaying the zombies. After all the zombies were dead, the little girl introduced her name as Fanta Grape
Fanta Grape was the owner of the pouch with a hundred gold coins. She saw a pouch with a hundred gold coins held by Jacob and said: "It's my grandmother"
Jacob replied: "Thank you for saving us" - and asked a lot of questions: "How your grandmother can be these coins? Which one is her? How can we find her?" Fanta smiled and said: "Her soul is in the smallest coin, just give me that one". They gave it to Fanta and the rest were used to rebuild the house and a new school for poor children in the village.
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Before corrections
As soon as Megan and Jacob Edman had bought the old house at the end of Elm Street they began renovating it. When they were tearing up the old floor they found a pouch with a hundred gold coins, two hundred years old. They were very excited, but they were not sure they could claim them as theirs.
they also find old treasure map , and they find sescret tunnel under the house , they desided to explore using the treasure map .
after they explore using the treasure map, the found something in the secret tunnel under the house
they found a treasure chest filled by candy!
they were not sure how long the candies had been there, but to think it would be a waste to leave them there so they picked them all up with a sack
When Jacob carried them on his shoulders, Megan said "What are you going to do with them? They maybe cursed"
they met 3 purple unicorns and they were invited to fly to the unicorn world
The bright shine came from above, then they started to see the unicorns alive. Jacob asked Megan, "Let's go Megan, we would see where the unicorns headed to."
They could ride the unicorns. They arrived somewhere spooky place .
the spooky place called "St. John's Farm". The farm had been abandoned . After found that farm, they decided to check that farm, and they found dead people walking!!
The dead people look like zombie and came very quickly to them. Megan started freaking out and shout at them. Jacob thought about the candies they found and throw some at them while running. The zombies stopped at those candies
The zombies took the candies and ate them. Not long after they ate the candies, they turned into rainbow sheep
There were some surviving zombies. Then unicorns came closer to Jacob and Megan, unicorns transformed into great magician.
The great magician gave them magical stick . the magical stick make them wish come true only one time.
jacob and macon wished that the dead people walking are gone, but the magician can't grant that wish. After that, the magician was disappeared, both of they have panicked after the little girl showed up and shoot some zombies
most of the zombies which weren't turned into rainbow sheeps kept following them because there were no candies left, so the little girl kept slaying the zombies. After all the zombies were dead, the little girl introduce her name as Fanta Grepe
Fanta grape were the owner of a pouch with a hundred gold coins. She saw a pouch with a hundred gold coins held by Jacob and said "it has my grandmother"
Jacob replied " thank you for saving (protecting) us" and asked a lot of questions "but how your grandmother can be in these coins? which is her? how can we find her?". Fanta smiled and said "her soul is in the smallest coin, just gave me that one". They gave it to Fanta and the rest of them were used to rebuild the house and new school for poor children in the village.
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