Story writing class: Sunday at 7am PST
at the end you can read the story before corrections
One day he finds a bottle. The label says: " Superpower potion. Danger, don't drink."
He can't read, so he drinks it.
He feels all his muscle tighten, all his senses become alive. He hears the screaming from afar and he can see from where the scream comes from. His body feels like a feather, he tries to lift himself and sees his feet above the ground.
He doesn't understand what is happening. He tries to speak bot he only can bark.
The voice became close to him, closer and closer. He feels dazed. He wakes up and finds himself sleeping in a huge place. He sees a man, a woman, and 2 guys around his luxury bed.
They have two dogs and three cats. He (the Man) wants to bark, but his mouth salivates a lot.
The dog licks a drop of the super potion on the floor. The cat runs to the corner and screams.
What is the magical potion's effect ? Who knows...
The dog's body becomes bigger and bigger. The whole body is changing into a human ghost.
But the dog seems shocked, because its changing into a horrible thing. Suddenly, something goes wrong and the dog is suffocating and passes out.
The Man barks to the human ghost dog. And the ghost disappeares.
Then, cat starts meowing loudly .
He said, wow!!! Really?? Is it OK?? Are you sure?? wow!
He is so surprised because he can understand what the cat is saying.
Meanwhile, the four people in the room are absorbed by the scene they are seeing. Everything it's surreal.
The ghost changes into a handsome man, his voice also changes into the voice of a wise man. He says to The Man "Welcome to your home"
He opens his arms to receive the Man without a name. He whispers to his ears: "I will give you a name, you will be known by this name and everyone will acknowledge the greatness that comes from your name."
Your name is 'Monster Energy'..... "Film cut!!" - the video director says. "Good job everyone! we shoot a nice movie! This drink will be famous, you all did well. Good job!
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BEFORE CORRECTIONS
The Man has no name. He lives in a garbage dump. All he can remember is that his parents were killed by robbers when he was a child. He ran away and has been living here since then.
One day he finds a bottle. The label says: " Superpower potion. Danger, don't drink."
He can't read, so he drinks it.
He feels all his muscle tighten, all his senses become alive. He hears the screaming from afar and he can see from where the scream come from. His body feels like a feather, he try to lift himself and see his feet above the ground.
He doesn't understand what is happening. He tries to speak bot he only can barks.
the voice became close to him, More close and close.He felt daze. He wake up and found him self sleeping in a huge place. He saw a man , woman ,and 2 guys around his luxuray bed.
And they have two dogs and three cat. and seems want to bark, but dog keeps his mouse with many water flow.
The dog licks the drop of thesuperspotion on the floor.n The cat runs to the corner and screams.
What is the magical potion's effect ? Who knows...
the dog body becomes bigger and bigger. whole body is changing to shape a human ghost.
But the dog seems retarded, because it's changing into a horrible thing. Suddenly, it goes error then the dog is sufffocating and pass out.
And The Man barked to the human ghost dog. And ghost disapeared.
Then, cat start barking hardly.
And he said, wow!!! really?? Is it OK?? are you sure?? wow!
He is so surprised that he can understand what cat saying.
Meanwhile, the four people on the room are absorbed by the scene they are seeing. Everything it's surreal.
the ghost changes into a handsome man, His voice also changes into a wise man. He says to The Man " Welcome in your Home"
He opens his arms to receive the man without name. He whisper to his ears I will give a name, you will known by this name and everyone will aknowledge the greatness that comes from your name.
your name is 'Monster Energy'..... film cut!! video director said. "good job everyone! we shoot nice movie! this drink will be famous, you all did well.Good job!
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