The Betrothed (2014)

Story writing class: Sunday at 7am PDT
At the end you can read the story before corrections. 
 
The man is kneeling before Emma. With one hand, he holds hers. With his other hand, he is taking a small box out of his pocket.
Emma is so happy she's almost crying.
Emma wakes up on her couch, in front of the TV. The movie ended hours ago. She's sore all over because she slept in a bad position.
It was just a dream, but it felt so real. No time to linger on that bittersweet feeling though. It's time to get up and go to work.

She slowly gets up from the couch and starts to walk towards the bathroom, "I need a hot shower", she thinks. While inside the bathroom, she thinks about her dream, "Maybe Jeff would have proposed to me." She smiles at the thought of it.

Emma goes to bed and sleeps because she feels tired after training.
Then she wakes up and watches the TV.

On the television she sees a drama series that she has never seen before. The story is pretty much the same as  her love story. Jeff has an anxiety problem, like the main character. His family is the  educated, intelligent kind but very picky in choosing the people to be friends with. They seem to live in their world.

Emma is having second thoughts about Jeff, if he ever will propose to her, because of his difficult personality. She wonders why on earth she is still seeing him. "Perhaps I should tell him that I will not see him anymore", she thinks.

But Jeff loves Emma more than any other one on the earth. Emma decides to give Jeff a little chance.

Emma has a difficult time in taking a decision. She's not young anymore, what she needs is to be a beautiful bride. They have been in a relationship for five years, but Jeff is always asking her to be patient.
On other side, Jeff's parents have already found a better wife for him. When Jeff tells Emma about it, she is really disappointed and depressed at the same time.

Jeff is confused whether to marry the woman that his parents have chosen for him or to follow his heart. Emma is happy to learn that Jeff is engaged to another woman. "Now I am free", she thinks. Jeff's parents demand that he marries the woman they want. They tell Jeff that he will be disinherited if he marries Emma. Jeff agrees with his parents decision. Jeff has his inheritance and Emma has her freedom.


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before corrections

The man is kneeling before Emma. With one hand, he holds hers. With his other hand, he is taking a small box out of his pocket.
Emma is so happy she's almost crying.
Emma wakes up on her couch, in front of the TV. The movie ended hours ago. She's sore all over because she slept in a bad position.
It was just a dream, but it felt so real. No time to linger on that bittersweet feeling though. It's time to get up and go to work.

She slowly got up from the couch and started walking towards the bathroom, "I need a hot shower" she thought. While inside the bathroom, she was thinking of her dream, "maybe Jeff would proposed to me" she was smiling of the thought of it.

Emma go to the bed and sleep because to fell the tired aftar training then wake up and watching tv

On the television she is seeing a drama series that she didn't know, but the story pretty same like her love story. Jeff has anxiety problem like the main character has. His family is the unique kind, educate, intelligent but very picky person to have friendship to others. They seems live in their world.


Emma is having second thought if ever Jeff will propose to her because of his difficult personality and she wondered why on earth she is still seeing him. "Perhaps I should tell him that I will not see him anymore" she thinks.

But Jeff love Emma more than anthor one one the Earth Emma she think to need Jeff little chance .

Emma has a difficult days to get desicion. She's not young anymore, what she need is being a beautiful bride, because they in relationship for 5 years but Jeff always asking her to be patience. In other side, Jeff parents already find better wife to him. When Jeff tells Emma about it, she really dissapoints and in depress at the same time.

Jeff is confuse either to marry the woman that his parents have chosen for him or to follow his heart. Emma is happy to learn that Jeff is engage to another woman. " Now I am free" she thinks. Jeff's parents is very indignant about him marrying the woman they want. They told Jeff that he will be disinherited if he will marry Emma. Jeff agree with his parents decision. Jeff has his inheritance and Emma has her freedom.

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